Tal's Spacebar

I mean that my suspicion that Everet is half human isn't substantiated, not that your writing isn't. That's working very well.

Gotcha. Yeah, I misunderstood. also, ty

I did try to address it slightly in 4 just in case though.

She has acquired a spine. Good…

It was easy! It only took a near-total destruction of her world.

Gonna make a specific request. If anyone feels anything is getting inexcusably morally squick at any point (and it feels like I'm excusing it or normalizing it), please let me know so I can steer. I'm juggling a lot of difficult things with this book, lol

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"Your life can only get better from here," he said simply. […] not having the faintest idea how wrong the road would prove him.

Maybe we should start a betting pool on how long it's going to take Tal to kill Everet in order to traumatise Miren further

0111narwhalz wrote: Fri Apr 03, 2026 8:04 pm

This construction right here

"Your life can only get better from here," he said simply. […] not having the faintest idea how wrong the road would prove him.

Ha! Unfortunately it's a chapter book and end of chapter cliffhangers are a great way to ensure the reader wants to read the next chapter. ........assuming it's available, which it isn't for you guys exactly.

Dinosawer wrote: Fri Apr 03, 2026 9:17 pm

Maybe we should start a betting pool on how long it's going to take Tal to kill Everet in order to traumatise Miren further

Well, we're actually right at the end of act 1, entering act 2 of 3. I'll happily take bets on which part of which act it happens in!

Imma say end of act 2 then

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